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Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #hobbies
Some
hobbies
 are relatively easy.But these two types of
hobbies
 can be fun.I
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therefore
 disagree
the
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 statement that
the
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hobbies
 need to be difficult to be enjoyable. Some
hobbies
 are easy,but fun and interesting.
For example
,swimming is that I know easy
hobby
.
This
hobby
 requires a little equipment,
simple
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 to learn and
inexpensive
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is inexpensive
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.I remember learning to swim at my local swimming pool when I was a child.Photographe is easy,interesting and that
everyone
 can do
hobby
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.
On
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 my
opinion
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everyone
 can take
a
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 interesting photo without too
more
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know
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 about
this
hobby
.I took a
lot
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 interesting photos when I was a child.Photographe
is not requires
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 demanding and challenging.It is despite being straightforward it is satisfying.
On the other hand
,difficult
hobbies
 are so much exciting and relaxing.Difficult
hobbies
 require expertise and
challenging
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.But it
is give
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 us feeling greater and pleasure.
For example
,
the
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 film editing
require
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requires
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compotent
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competent
 and expertise.But when you can
this
 and reach,
then
 you performance feeling
compotent
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competent
 yourself and pleasure.You sense
of
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satisfaction and
successfully
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. In conclusion,easy
hobbies
 can be fun,but difficult
hobbies
equally
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are equally
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 more exciting and
requires
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 demanding.These two
types
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 of
hobbies
pleasurable
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are pleasurable
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.
Everyone
 has a favourite
hobby
.
Therefore
hobbies
 may easy or difficult.But it is not
problem
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a problem
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 that people
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are interest
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interest
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interested
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 in.
It
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 relevant to
everyone
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique challenge
  • personal growth
  • mastery
  • accomplishment
  • demanding
  • thrill of achievement
  • pastimes
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • mindfulness
  • stress relief
  • mental break
  • daily stressors
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