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over the last few decades,there has been an increase in international tourism.some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encourged.to what extent do you agree ?

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It is often said that nowadays about world travel and its important role in the international economy and a lot of country
communities
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. From my point of view, I partly agree with
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 point and explain the reasons for
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Firstly
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, a lot of
people
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 in our world like travel.
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 is not an amazing phenomenon, most of
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 citizens prefer to have many trips and unbelievable emotions. There is no denying, that folks a very interested in foreign culture, traditions, language, kitchen, relationships with
tourists
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,
tourists
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' preference for Europe has very big
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 among Asian and American tipsters. We all know international
tourists
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, they are positive, rich and attractive
people
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.
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, local
communities
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 have different incomes from international
tourists
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.
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 to the above point, most of
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people
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 of local
communities
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 like their land.
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 makes it clear why they are supporting local
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districts
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 for travelling.
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, the local government is developing different programmes for save and realisation economic ideas, which will be to support the local businesses of travel, which will help local
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 without international
tripsters
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tipsters
.
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, many
people
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 want to save their money
recources
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resources
 and they are will prefer local spaces and territories for rest, because it is
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cheaper than foreign places, taxes.
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, they will pay less for air, railway tickets, they do not need a visa and other international documents. In conclusion, I partly agree with
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 idea. In my opinion, international tourism helps the economy of local
communities
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 and their citizens, but
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 community can develop itself without world tourism.
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