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Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Regardless of many benefits, some people claim that the
internet
 poses many threats to society. I strongly agree with
this
 opinion because it exposes people to toxic
contents
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 and causes harm to
our
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 health
Firstly
, with a huge flow of information, it’s very difficult to censor digital content. So bad creators can freely spread harmful data which lead to meaningless arguments, cyberbullying, and sometimes, endanger the lives of its users.
For instance
, In order to get more click rates and benefits, many “adult” websites advocate the abuse of women. Because of that, they are vulnerable to
sex
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 trade and even slavery.
Secondly
, the
internet
 has a negative influence on people’s well-being. Compare to earlier generations, we spend too much time on social media
instead
 of connecting to others in person.
As a result
, we feel less emotionally satisfied, more isolated, and eventually lead to mental illness like depression or anxiety. Research shows that depression rates in
internet
 users are higher than
non-users
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 by 38%. In conclusion, cyberspace is the source of many issues.
However
, the
internet
 is still an essential part of our life because of the convenience it brings to life.
Therefore
, in order to protect
ourself
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, we should educate people about the web and its consequences.
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