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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universities. Discuss the advantages.

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In modern society, teenagers have a lot of problems in their
life
. Most of them should
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 about
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 a gar year after finishing high school or other study organization before beginning their university
life
. In
this
 essay, I will describe the reasons for
this
 trend, pros and cons as a consequence of
this
 idea. I will give examples of possible causes and I will explain the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 situation.
To begin
 with, we live in a very busy
lifetime
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 and we all know
a
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young
people
. They like
a
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full liberty in society due to their character.
For example
, teenagers like to walk,
relaxation
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,
conversation
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conversations
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 with parents and
people
 around. These
people
 want to do different
discovery
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discoveries
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 in
life
.
Gap
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 year is
great
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a great
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 possibility for realization ideas. Another example
which
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, explains an increasing trend, is hard study programs in their high school. These are years are
very
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a very
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 big adventure. Young girls and boys have
possibity
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possibility
 for rest. Advantages clearly work in favour
for
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happy
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 teenagers' future.
On the other hand
, after using a gap year young
people
 can have a negative relaxation, which
connect
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 with their lazy and boring. Disadvantages become significant after over
this
 time-out between finishing high school and starting universities
,
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 when
teenager
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teenagers
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 do not have
idea
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ideas
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 and plans for their
education
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 future.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, young
girl
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girls
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 or
boy
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boys
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 can to very increase
work
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their work
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 time and just forget about
university
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the university
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 and do not get
the
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a
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 professional education for
future
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their future
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career
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. In conclusion, I believe that the positive side of
this
 trend outweighs the negative sides
,
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 because young folks must have
a
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freedom in their
life
, only they decide how
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 their free time.
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