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In many cities of the world, traffic congestion is a serious problem.   What are the causes and what can be done about it?

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Traffic
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 congestion is the biggest issue in the number of cities over the globe and reasons could be from,increasing number of personal
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 as well as migration of
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 to urban areas for living and solution can be limiting the entry of
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 in rush hours and promoting public transport by every possible means. Long queues on the roads in metro cities are the largest headaches for governing bodies of those countries and contributing factors for
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, a growing number of private
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 for commute,followed by lack of convenient public transport services which can provide timely and efficient services for daily travellers for job and business.
People
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 with better financial status are buying
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 for recreation purposes and
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 can add up to the
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 congestion .Outdated road infrastructure can be another reason for the above-mentioned problem because it fails in establishing smooth
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 on roads. Solution of long-lasting
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 is not easy at all and it will require efforts from the public as well as government authorities to work together .Governments can restrict the entry of
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 to the
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 centres during rush hour by banning personal
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 and establishing public transport for access to the
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 centres.Encouraging
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 to commute by using bicycles whenever possible and offering incentives to the regular users for their compliance to requests. Moving some public offices in outskirts of the
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 so fewer
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 need to enter into the
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. In conclusion ,
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 issues are man-made problems and can be resolved by using the above suggestions plus constantly keeping eyes on updates in science and technologies for better solutions to the trouble.
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