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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy with everything organised and in the correct place what is your opinion about this?

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There is no denying that it is important to remain clean and tidy with every
items
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 organized and allocated in the right place, whether in your home or
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workplace
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work place
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.
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 some
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who
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feel that it is not necessary to maintain the surrounding
environment
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 clean because it wastes too much time to do that.
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, I strongly support
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the idea that it is vital to keep every
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 with clean and well management status. It is well-grounded for the
people
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 to accept that there is sort of benefits for
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 who well manage their surrounding
environment
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. The
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 reason backing up
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 stance is that
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 can find their
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 easily.
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, a well-organized file drawer makes
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 work more efficiently at
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 time to reduce mistakes
happened
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that happened
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 during their
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, another reason associated with
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 stance might be that the hygienic
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 has a significant influence
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people
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’s health no matter in their
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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 or home. Because
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of
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if
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 the unclean
environment
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it
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is
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likely
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 to breed bacteria and pests that may cause
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a negative
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 impact
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people
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, if the food wastage didn’t clean properly, the number of bacteria or the virus carriers will grow up in a few days, after that the bacteria will spread into
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 and carriers will build their nest to bear more carries.
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,
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high
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 opportunity to cause sickness or infection to other
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 and your family. In summary, keeping house and workplace tidy is a good habit. It has many benefits not only for yourself but
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 for your family and other
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 surrounding you.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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