The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In modern
society
, different
media
products have a big important role in
people
's relationships, conversations and
society
. In
this
essay, I will describe the reasons for
this
trend, pros and cons as a consequence of
this
idea. I will give examples of possible causes and I will explain the advantages and disadvantages of
this
situation.
To begin
with, one of the main drawbacks that should be considered is not face-to-face contact between
people
.
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, in
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time
people
were
more happy
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when had physical contact and conversation was
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and live.
Additionally
, we still need
a
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training
our
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social skills,
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pleasure from our speech and our
listenening
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listening
. Needless to say that social
media
are very terrible for our organism - brain, eyes and different anatomic
things
get much pressure from computers, telephones and other gadgets with social
media
platforms,
also
people
waste a lot of time due to social
media
. All
things
considered,
this
makes it clear the disadvantages of using
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social
media
, are conspicuous that should not be ignored.
Secondly
, apart from drawbacks, some benefits should be introduced.
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rapid world time is running out and
people
must do their
things
very quickly. And these
thing
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be
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a success
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success
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,
society
should use conversation always, social
media
are
great
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useful instrument for present
people
.
Moreover
, most of them can not do
things
without
Internet
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and gadgets.
Therefore
, it becomes apparent there are numerous benefits behind each drawback that must be reflected on. In conclusion, I believe that the positive side of
this
trend outweighs the negative sides
,
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because social
media
very help our world
society
for international connection, we can know a lot of events, many interesting
things
about
this
world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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