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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think advantage of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

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I would probably say that the entrance fee for the gallery is a need for sustainability. In my ,opinion the advantages of charging people outweigh the disadvantages. One of the benefits of ticket fees is a foundation for the museum budget. If a museum has become a self-funding structure it would be long-lasting. When the management has enough refund it would be easy to get their own decisions
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 to expand the hall or to exhibit different objects. On the other ,hand admission fees can only be for the special parts of the museum-like halls, where the rental objects from other halls have been presented.
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 would have an upregulation effect on visitors count
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 it may cause an ascending impact on income. In ,conclusion even it can be a partially charging system for visiting buildings there are more advantages of admission fees rather than free entrances. It is indispensable to think that foundations afford to apply by donations nowadays.
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