Some people say that in modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to healthy ad fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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of society bring many disadvantages for

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who want to have a healthy

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or motorbike. They are

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like to eat fast food than cook meals at home to save time, which is the cause of obesity

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in modern times due to various

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you can make a routine for

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and try to be consistent with it .

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to your diet can help you keep fit.

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to live healthier, you can see many

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on social media that inspired motivations or copy some tips in life. In conclusion, I agree that having a healthy

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world is not easy, we need to have a having a healthy way of living or not is

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difficult and it depends on each person’s choices.

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Some people say that in modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to healthy ad fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Your opinion

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

You have just returned from holiday and were not satisfied with your trip. Write to the travel agency. In your letter •Say where / when you went on holiday •Explain why you are not satisfied with your holiday •Tell them what you would like them to do

Many people use distance learning programmes to study at home, but others think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree.