Some people say that in modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to healthy ad fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, the
improving
of society bring many disadvantages for Replace the word
improvement
human
who want to have a healthy Add an article
a human
the human
lifestyle
but some people
believed that we have a better lifestyle
due to the improvement of technology and the environment Wrong verb form
surrounding
surrounded
. Recently, Correct pronoun usage
itsurrounded
this
phenomenon has been brought to public attention with people
standing on two different sides.
Firstly
, technology plays an important role these days but also
have an adverse impact on human. In recent years, many young people
can not live without mobile
Add an article
a mobile
the mobile
phone
, Fix the agreement mistake
phones
this things
may lead to psychological and physical issues, Change the determiner
this thing
these things
such
as eyestrain and difficulty focusing on important
Add an article
an important
the important
task
. Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
Moreover
, it is believed that in today
society, Change noun form
today's
people
are lazier than in the past. With the rapid change of the world, there are many thing
was invested Change to a plural noun
things
for
supporting humans. Despite walking 1km to go to work, the worker Change preposition
in
prefer
using Change the verb form
prefers
car
or motorbike. They are Correct article usage
a car
also
like to eat fast food than cook meals at home to save time, which is the cause of obesity
Although
it is difficult to follow healthy
Add an article
a healthy
lifestyle
in modern times due to various distraction
Fix the agreement mistake
distractions
but
you can make a routine for Remove the conjunction
apply
healthy
Add an article
a healthy
lifestyle
and try to be consistent with it . For example
, doing exercise regulary
and adding more veggies and Correct your spelling
regularly
vegetable
to your diet can help you keep fit. Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
Futhermore
, we can Correct your spelling
Furthermore
using
the improvement of Change the verb form
use
be using
Internet
to live healthier, you can see many Add an article
the Internet
people
on social media that inspired motivations or copy some tips in life.
In conclusion, I agree that having a healthy lifestyle
in modern
world is not easy, we need to have a having a healthy way of living or not is Add an article
the modern
not
difficult and it depends on each person’s choices.Rewrite the sentence
apply
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