Some people say that in modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to healthy ad fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, the
improving
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of society bring many disadvantages for
human
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a human
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who want to have a healthy
lifestyle
but some
people
believed that we have a better
lifestyle
due to the improvement of technology and the environment
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. Recently,
this
phenomenon has been brought to public attention with
people
standing on two different sides.
Firstly
, technology plays an important role these days but
also
have an adverse impact on human. In recent years, many young
people
can not live without
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phone
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,
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may lead to psychological and physical issues,
such
as eyestrain and difficulty focusing on
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task
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.
Moreover
, it is believed that in
today
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society,
people
are lazier than in the past. With the rapid change of the world, there are many
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was invested
for
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supporting humans. Despite walking 1km to go to work, the worker
prefer
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using
car
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or motorbike. They are
also
like to eat fast food than cook meals at home to save time, which is the cause of obesity
Although
it is difficult to follow
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
in modern times due to various
distraction
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but
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you can make a routine for
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
and try to be consistent with it .
For example
, doing exercise
regulary
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regularly
and adding more veggies and
vegetable
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to your diet can help you keep fit.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, we can
using
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the improvement of
Internet
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to live healthier, you can see many
people
on social media that inspired motivations or copy some tips in life. In conclusion, I agree that having a healthy
lifestyle
in
modern
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world is not easy, we need to have a having a healthy way of living or not is
not
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difficult and it depends on each person’s choices.
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