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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions. Several Nations have observed an enormous increase in crime amid youngsters.

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"Youngsters are the future of the nation". Every nation’s growth and development is depended upon the quality of its youngsters. Unfortunately, the future generation is not on the path of their social responsibility. The crime rates among teenagers have increased dramatically in many nations.
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 passage is intended to discuss some of the possible reasons for the increased crime rate and the ways to mitigate the same. There are majorly two reasons which contribute to the increased indisciplined act amongst the teenagers.
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, it is the lack of caring. Nowadays, in modern ,society double-income parents are quite common which makes them less time to spend with their children.
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, parents working for 8 hours daily cannot find much time for their offspring which in turn affects the child's behaviour.
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, it is the easy accessibility of modern electronic devices. The revolutionary invention of the internet and mobile phones have made the younger generation addicted.
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, the introduction of social media has made the situation even worse. Even though there are challenges
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 situation could be reversed by initiatives taken by
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. The
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 should make an effort and spend some time with their children and impart their moral values.
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 will help the future generation to refrain from any anti-social activities.
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, there should be strict surveillance from the side of
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 in using the internet and mobile phones. In conclusion, it is the responsibility of
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, teachers and parents to groom a teenager and make them socially responsible and guide them on the right path.
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