With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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worldwide web and

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social accounts as they have

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they face consequences which have

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impact on them and

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problems. I agree with

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having to limit the usage of the

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the usage of the

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how it affects them without the supervision of their

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children are becoming addicted to many derogatory websites which are widely available on the

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. These unethical and immoral activities on the

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have a disastrous impact on the mentality of young people.

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technology has been tremendously changing;

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accounts

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different social media platforms and sometimes

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consequences which affect the ability of the kid to think and develop.

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11-14 years of age have accounts

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extent that they speak abusive words.

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should prevent access to these sites and monitor their children's use of them at home, ensuring that their children are protected from the indecent info available on the

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, there is a societal evil known as "

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bullying," which is on the rise.

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and keeping an on their

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can reduce the number of

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bullying. In conclusion, the

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have to understand the difference

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using the

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wisely and not having problems and

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their

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without affecting the

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freedom

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necessary.