With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?
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parents
having to limit the usage of the internet
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how it affects them without the supervision of their parents
. To begin
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children are becoming addicted to many derogatory websites which are widely available on the Correct article usage
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internet
. These unethical and immoral activities on the internet
have a disastrous impact on the mentality of young people. Due to the
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As a result
, parents
should prevent access to these sites and monitor their children's use of them at home, ensuring that their children are protected from the indecent info available on the internet
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, there is a societal evil known as "Internet
bullying," which is on the rise. For example
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having
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Linking words are very important in your essay.
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