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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research ,business and the academic world. others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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People have different views about sharing scientific,business and academic
information
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.some believe it is better to share all possible
information
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 while others believe valuable and important
information
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 should not establish for free. In my point of view ,it is better not to share important
information
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 freely. On the one hand ,sharing all kinds of
information
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 can have some advantages for pupils .
firstly
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 if all people have access to
research
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 freely the tendency to study will increase and it helps to enhance public knowledge.
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secondly
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 open-access
research
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 let talented individuals who cannot afford the cost of
research
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, use free
information
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 and have a chance to present their potential intelligence.
On the other hand
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 ,in some others’ view
information
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 should not be published freely .
firstly
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 scientists and researchers cost time and
money
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 to do their
studies
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 so it needs to those costs be compensated. By paying
money
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 for
research
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,the owners will be able to afford the expenses of continuing and developing those unfinished fields of study.In
this
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 case, I remember one of my friends who was a bookworm and intelligent at university had to leave his
studies
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 because the cost of experiments was high and he could not meet his daily basic needs.
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 , paying
money
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 for
studies
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 can be seen as motivation and perks for scientists and writers to expand their
studies
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 in the new objects and issues. In conclusion ,
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 both views have some advantages, I believe we should support scientists and researchers by spending
money
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 on their worthwhile knowledge.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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