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Space travel has been possible for some time and some people believe that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

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Nowadays, there is not a massive dream for people to discover
space
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the space
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 universe, which
have
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 commenced
throughout
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 a lot of practical experiences. Personally, I totally am in opinion of that
space
 tourism is going to
obtained
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 in the future. On the
hand
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other hand
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, there
are
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is
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 a large amount of development
on
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in
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 technology and sciences, which urged
space
traveling
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travelling
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.
First
 of all, technologic energy is strong enough to adopt in all of
journey
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the journey
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 by the way that
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takes
take
taked
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took
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 advantage of solar from the sun or power-saving
equipments
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equipment
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.
Besides
, nuclear power is
also
 studied in order to integrate into
dynamic
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the dynamic
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 of rockets.
Secondly
, it is a supreme vital to make sure
customers’s
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customers
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 safe,
consequently
 company concentrate on progressing material
mechanism
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mechanisms
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 in
amour
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the amour
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 of rockets.
Furthermore
, all of
system
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the system
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 is under
control
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the control
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 of artificial intelligence which cooperated with a huge number of sensitive sensors. Actually, there are a lot of launchings brought on senior leaders or sponsors in order to convince safety level of
trip
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the trip
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, which is not only proving possible perspective but
also
 illustrating ambition of human. On other hand, it is essential to prevent
over
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apply
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pollution is generated by experiences on
space
 tourism, so nations may
need
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toneed
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 enact
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a resolution
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resolution
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resolutions
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 to restrict destroying environment into
space
company
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companies
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.
In addition
,
that is
 a struggle to influence
on
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apply
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either security in
space
 among countries or
politics
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political
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 activities
which
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that
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 may threaten mutual. In conclusion, I am complete agree with developing
space
 travel and believe that it may get success soon.
Although
 guaranteeing safe for passengers is
priority
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a priority
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, invading
space
 outside the earth is always present.
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