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Writing Samples
Band 7

An historic building in your city is in bad condition. Write to the local government. Include in your letter: Why the building is important Its present condition What action must be taken

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to bring your attention towards the poor condition of
Sikh
Correct article usage
the Sikh
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 Heritage Museum, Amritsar, which needs immediate improvements. I visited there
last
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 week with my friend, who is from a different religion and wanted to know about sikhism. Unfortunately, we were both deeply disappointed by the current state of
this
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 historic site. Most of the windows, floor tiles were broken , and some rooms were flooded with rainwater.
Also
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, after a quick conversation with the security guard, I got to know that the number of tourists has declined by 50% in the
last
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 two years
due to
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 poor maintenance and lack of facilities.
This
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 building is precious, as it is the only building left, which was constructed during sikh rule, and it houses not only important sculptures and records of achievements, but
also
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 the emotions, struggles, and legacy of our ancestors..
Thus
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, it is essential to keep it safe for the next generations.
Therefore
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, I would like to make a humble request to start the renovation as soon as possible, so that people can start revisiting. If you allow, I am
also
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 willing to offer financial support for the restoration. I hope for prompt action. Yours faithfully, XXXXXXXXXXX

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task response
Explain why the building is important and give clear steps for action. Keep each idea in a new sentence or line.
coherence cohesion
Put ideas into separate short parts and group related facts. Start a new line for each main idea and use simple links to join them.
tone
Formal tone and polite closing are in place.
task response
Clear purpose and request for action are stated.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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