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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Friendship is a beautiful asset to our lives. A section of society believes in finding
friends
 who always agree with the viewpoint of each other whereas many
people
 opine that it is better to have
friends
 who show disagreements occasionally. While both views are worth discussing, in my
opinion
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friends
 with
different
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perspective
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perspectives
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 on a subject can sometimes help us to make better decisions. I will discuss the merits of having
friends
 who always agree with us and who sometimes disagree in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, some
people
 like
friends
 who have the same opinions as them because they think
this
 is beneficial for the friendship. To cite an example,
friends
 who are like-minded, share similar sentiments and
having
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same
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 outlooks, can maintain a lifelong relationship. A study shows that
,
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 relationships with
less
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fewer
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 quarrels and
disagreement
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disagreements
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 persist longer than
the
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ones with differences.
On the contrary
, a few
people
 think that
friends
 should have different opinions sometimes as it maintains honesty in friendships. To substantiate, if two
friends
 have different thoughts on a situation, it is useful to analyze both
point
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 of
views
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view
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 because, if one idea fails, there always would be a
back up
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.
A recent
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 research conducted by
the
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Cambridge University shows that, if
people
 are aware of the negative and positive sides of something, they tend to be in a win-win situation. To conclude, having
friends
 with similar thoughts lead to fewer conflicts, whereas disagreements in friendships sometimes help to judge a situation from a different perspective.
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  • harmonious
  • stress-free
  • disagreements
  • conflicts
  • reinforce
  • validate
  • comforting
  • reassuring
  • broaden your understanding
  • perspectives
  • challenge intellectually
  • think critically
  • personal growth
  • development
  • healthy debates
  • communication skills
  • mutual respect
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