The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Give reasons? Suggest Solutions

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Humans are born innocent in nature without sins. They come to life like angels. Either they acquire good
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or bad ones. One of the bad
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spreading fast in many countries, among
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is
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. There are many reasons standing behind these bad attitudes. In the beginning, the family background and culture play an important role in raising
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children.
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if one of the parents is a criminal, the percentage that an offspring to be similar is high. Plus, the
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of relationships between the mother and father
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an important
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in transforming their son or daughter into an aggressive one. Poverty is another reason that makes a teenager commit an offence. The urge to money makes some
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think that doing a crime and throbbing is
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to get money.
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, nowadays most
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cartoons and movies are based on
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and violence. They draw the attention of the kids toward
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aggressiveness
. which lead them later on to
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unintentionly
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unintentionally
.These
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are not only done against others but
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also
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could be towards the person himself. Suicides, killing and torturing what social media promote indirectly.
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social media as a whole is a sword with two faces. A face that
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lots of bad mindsets and ideas
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in directly
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teenagers
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brain toward
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. A sum up, the
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adolescents
are the victims of various factors that are driving them towards immorality. Which contributes to do
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. whenever these factors are not present,
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are being safe and far away from murders and
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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