The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Give reasons? Suggest Solutions

Humans are born innocent in nature without sins. They come to life like angels. Either they acquire good behaviours or bad ones. One of the bad behaviours,
that is
spreading fast in many countries, among
teenagers
is
crime
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. There are many reasons standing behind these bad attitudes. In the beginning, the family background and culture play an important role in raising children
up
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.
For example
, if one of the parents is a criminal, the percentage that an offspring to be similar is high. Plus, the instability of relationships between the mother and father play an important role in transforming their son or daughter into an aggressive one. Poverty is another reason that makes a teenager commit an offence. The urge to money makes some
teenagers
think that doing a crime and throbbing is the best way to get money.
Moreover
, nowadays most cartoons and movies are based on fights and violence. They draw the attention of the kids toward
aggresisveness
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aggressiveness
.Which lead them later on to
crimes
unintentionlly
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unintentionally
.These
crimes
are not only done against others but they
also
could be towards the person himself. Suicides, killing and torturing what social media promote indirectly.
Therefore
social media as a whole is a sword with two faces. A face that
carry
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lots of bad mindsets and ideas
that is
been implemented indirectly in
teenagers
' brain toward
crimes
. A sum up,
the
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adolescents are the victims of various factors that are driving them towards immorality. Which contributes to do
crimes
. whenever these factors are not present,
teenagers
are being safe and far away from murders and
crimes
.
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