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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Nowadays, many nations are
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immigration
 to other countries to get
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 opportunity
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 jobs and education. While some argue that who lives in a country, where they speak their own
language
, I strongly agree that can impact
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social
 problems issue. Because of the communication and convenience life lives.
First
 of all,
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communicate
 is significant for lives in the country where they speak their own
language
.
For example
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foreigner
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foreigners
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 who is want to buy a bottle of water at the local shop but they could not speak
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languate
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language
languages
, it might take time to talk to
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understand
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 or they cannot get want they need it. As you can see
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communicate
 has a large impact on social problems.
In addition
, convenience life,
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 countries most of
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 can only speak their own
language
, which means including public transportation
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,
restuarants
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restaurants
, and local products will be only their own
language
,
as a result
, it is would
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 to
people
 who do not know
foregin
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foreign
language
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue that it is a good opportunity to leaning with
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speaker
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.
In certain
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 situations,
such
 as
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learning
 new vocabulary and culture. may be
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relevant
.
However
,
this
 argument is flawed because
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it is hard
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 old
people
 who are not ready to
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 new things. In conclusion, I agree that
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 a foreign
language
 can cause serious social problems. there are arguments on both sides of the issue, but
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ultimately
, communicate and
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 life show that it is difficult
to
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people
 who live in a country that they speak their own
language
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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