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the average time spent on social media in four various applications between 2000 to 2020.

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The given bar chart illustrates the average
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 spent on social media in four various applications between 2000 to 2020. Overall. It is clear that the
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 spent on Twitter was increased dramatically and more people spent
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 on Facebook in 2000 than they did later on. According to the chart, in 2016, The people spent the most
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 on Facebook, with about almost 25
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,higher than that of Snapchat by roundly one
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, the figure dropped steeply to approximately only 2
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 four years later.
In contrast
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,Snapchat indicated the lowest amount of
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 spent in 2016, with only just over 10
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 in 2016, it reached its peak at around 45
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 in 2019 and
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 returned to nearly its original point a year later. Twitter and Instagram share a similar figure of
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 spending of approximately almost 25
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 in 2016. while the number of Twitter
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 spent rose significantly, reaching almost 45
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 for the period, the amount of
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 spent on Instagram grew noticeable to around 45
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, its figure fell slightly to just under 40
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 in 2020.
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