The diagrams below show how glass containers, such as glass bottles are produced and recycled
The diagrams illustrate how
glass
containers are made and recycled.
By looking at the diagrams, we can tell that there are three main stages in Use synonyms
glass
production Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
glass
recycling process has five main stages. So there are more stages in recycling progress compared to manufacturing.
In Use synonyms
glass
production, the first stage is when raw materials Use synonyms
such
as sand, soda ash, limestone and other chemicals that Linking Words
are
are needed for Unnecessary verb
apply
glass
are mixed together and melted at a Use synonyms
glass
furnace with Use synonyms
the
temperature of approximately 1500 Correct article usage
a
degree
C. And molten Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
glass
Use synonyms
are
get from the furnace and blown into the desired shapes that Change the verb form
is
needed
for Add a missing verb
are needed
glass
containers.
The recycling process commences with gathering wasted Use synonyms
glass
containers and collected Use synonyms
glass
bottles are sorted by Use synonyms
colours
. Fix the agreement mistake
colour
Next
, these are washed to remove impurities Linking Words
such
as Linking Words
the
dust before Correct article usage
apply
crashed
into pieces and melting into molten Wrong verb form
crashing
glass
. Use synonyms
Finally
, the molten Linking Words
glass
is moulded into new Use synonyms
glass
products.Use synonyms
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