While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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amount of individuals
believe
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that
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crucial atmospheric problem is global warming while others
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about
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the destruction of world wild resources. Both global warming and
deforestation
have
negative
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a negative
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impact on the world.
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essay will discuss both points and will give my opinion. To commence on, global warming is one of the major
problem
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problems
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addressed by the environment. Some of the major reasons
of
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this
condition
is
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destruction
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the destruction
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of forest and industrialization. Due to industrialization, air
get
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contaminated and there is not much greenery for reversing
this
condition. Global warming and
deforestation
are directly proportional factors. All these things resulted in
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in atmospheric temperature which eventually make
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of ice
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Polar Regions.
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, recent articles
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water
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the water
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level in the sea is getting high due to
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of ice near the poles. Global warming is not a myth it’s a fact.
However
,
to address
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this
problem is important now. Industrialisation
play
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a key role in the quality of our life so we cannot stop developments. But we can reduce
deforestation
.
Firstly
government should take
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the necessary
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step
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steps
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to create
small
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a small
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forest
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forests
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in the middle of cities.
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, Singapore authorities develop a forest in the middle of the town for jungle safari.
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technology we can adopt to make wild greenery.
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take necessary steps to control air
pollutions
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pollution
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. Because scientific studies reported that increased air pollution is one of the
reason
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for
ozone
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layer hole. To conclude, preserving our earth is our responsibility. In order to save our
planet
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we have
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reduce
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deforestation
and take
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steps to decrease atmospheric temperature. According to
me
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global warming and
deforestation
are
two
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person
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in the same boat. Both are hazardous for our planet so immediate action is needed for
this
.
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  • moreover
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse effect
  • Industrial emissions
  • Sea levels
  • Extreme weather events
  • Biodiversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Paris Climate Accord
  • Carbon cycle
  • Soil erosion
  • Water cycles
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable forest management
  • Indigenous communities
  • Localized impacts
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