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Write a letter to a friend who is looking for a part time job. Describe a job you have found for him/her. In your letter you have to say: what are the duties? why do you think it is a good job for him/her? what does he/she have to do to get it? You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear _ ,

#friend #part #time #job #duties #address #_
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Dear Rahul, Hope you are doing well, I am writing
this
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 letter to ask
your
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for your
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 help to find out some part-time jobs for me.
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 to our telephonic discussion and as you are aware
that
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apply
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, by
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 month beginning I am coming to Canada for
studying
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study
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 my MBA from Toronto
university
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 which is
two-year
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 program whereas during my study
i
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 can work at least 48 hours
in
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a week as per
Canada
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 government regulation.
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, I would like to inform you that,the
university
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 classes time are in the morning 7 to 12 o'clock and after ,that I have no other
works
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 so in
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 free time I can start part-time jobs,
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 will help me to gain some market experience which is helping me in the future during the job searching after study my
university
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 course, as well as
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,I can earn some money which helps me to pay the
university
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 fees and my daily expenses. Since you are staying there for the
last
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 five years, I believe that you have some networks and friends in the market who can help me to find out part-time job
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i
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 remember you were
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 doing part-time work during your studies. I can work in restaurants, shops, factories or offices. I will be grateful for your help. I looking forward to seeing you soon. Lost of love Jadav Raghuvir
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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