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A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child's development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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A good thing that can improve an infant's development is a gift,
such
 as a game, a basketball or even a pet. I particularly like presenting a child with a
puzzle
, which can significantly help in childhood in different areas, in my opinion. In
this
 essay, I will
first
 illustrate
this
 present,
then
, I will explain why I chose
this
 as my favourite gift.
To begin
 with, I would give a
puzzle
 as a present because it has many versions, including a 3D one, as well as is possible to find a huge amount of options for different ages, from toddlers to teenagers and adults.
Likewise
, there are puzzles with a high level of complexity, especially those composed of many points.
In addition
,
this
 kind of game can be played with all family or alone. A great instance of it is that ones which have more than 50000 items, which it's an amazing opportunity to play with someone, else. In that way, the
puzzle
 can get together the immediate relatives as
such
 as promoting an appropriate moment to share the experiences lived during the day.
Furthermore
,
this
 activity is able to develop functions like motor coordinator, mainly the accurate ability, which is crucial for the development of the writing while the infant is being literate.
On the other hand
,
this
 one is a concentration exercise as well as a memory workout.
As a result
, the youth increase their capacity to pay attention in the classroom and,
consequently
, soak up more content. Summing up, I would definitely give a
puzzle
 to a child, no matter the age it has, due to the benefits that it could offer in a simple game.
Besides
 being easy to learn how to play, it can significantly make difference in their development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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