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Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

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Over the years, a lot of
students
 have done some unpaid voluntary
work
. The question arises if
this
 needs to be obligated for all
students
. Underneath, I will form an opinion on the given issue.
Firstly
, by doing voluntary
work
,
students
 will enrich their social view of the world. They can help
people
, who are having a hard timing because of their medical or cultural background.
Consequently
, the view of the
students
 will be broadened.
Secondly
, at the moment everything is about making money fast.
This
 will lead to a situation where
people
 do not want to
work
 hard for someone else
instead
 of working for their own wallet. If a student can do voluntary
work
, they learn that not everything is about making money.
Next
 to that, they
also
 learn that sometimes it is better to give than to get something.
On the other hand
, some
people
 disagree on
this
 matter. They think
that is
 not necessary for a teenager to do voluntary
work
 as obligated by the law. The reason behind
this
 is that they think that you have to be in control of your own life.
Next
 to that, Forcing someone to do something which they do not like can lead to a situation where the quality of the voluntary
work
 decreases.
However
,
this
 group of
people
 has a very egocentric view of the world. It is not always about your own life. Sometimes it is
also
 necessary to help someone else. By doing so, you will
also
 be happier with yourself.
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conclusion, I think that it will be fine to obligate voluntary
work
 for all
students
.
This
 does not have to be a lot of hours, but if everyone does 1 week of voluntary
work
 in his life
then
 the world will be much better for everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • housing problems
  • countryside
  • large companies
  • factories
  • employees
  • urban areas
  • land availability
  • relocate
  • stimulate economic development
  • challenges
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • rural areas
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