Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime.
Crime
seems to be increasing in some countries around the world, particularly teenagers
and young adults. The causes of Change preposition
among teenagers
this
appears
to be focused on 2 origins and the number of solution Change the verb form
appear
also
appear
to be possible. Perhaps the main issue is related to moral Change the verb form
appears
emotion
and we need to give to the teaching of morals in childhood. There is a huge link between moral emotion
and crime
. Some research shows that adolescents are more likely to carry out violent acts if they need weak empathy, shame and guilt. There was a simple example occurred
in my country a few days ago. A girl spilt hot coffee on the head of another girl who does not know. It shows us that her moral emotional was poor and her self-control was Correct pronoun usage
that occurred
lack
. Now she is immediately Wrong verb form
lacking
labeled
as “bad” in social media. Another cause is too much screen Change the spelling
labelled
time
. They spend their free time
using social media and playing video games and some of them got
addicted Wrong verb form
get
it
. Many of them feature unbelievable Change preposition
to it
life style
, bad Correct your spelling
lifestyle
habit
, aggressive characters and Fix the agreement mistake
habits
crime
. It might lead children to believe such
behavior
is normal or even desirable. Turning to possible solutions, parents should spend Change the spelling
behaviour
time
with that teach
them morals andWrong verb form
teaching
Correct article usage
the
this
step, children would learn how to control their emotion
and they would not commit Fix the agreement mistake
emotions
crime
. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
Also
we should provide a good living environment Add a comma
Also,
which is supporting
their interest and Wrong verb form
that supports
connecting
others. Wrong verb form
connects
Also
Add a comma
,
hobby
which is helpful Add an article
a hobby
spending
their leisure Change preposition
in spending
time
. To sum up
, this
is a problem that connected
to moral Add a missing verb
is connected
emotion
and spending their free time
and solution
will require parents, Add an article
the solution
a solution
education
system and Correct article usage
the education
individual
.Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
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