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SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT PARENTS SHOUL ENCOURAGE THEIR CHILDREN TO TAKE PART IN ORGANIZED GROUP ACTIVITIES IN THEIR FREE TIME. OTHERS SAY THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO LEARN HOW TO OCCUPY THEMSELVES ON THEIR OWN. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR ON OPINION.

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is probably true to say that most people believe the best way for
children
 to fill their free time is participating in
group
activities
 yet others argue that
children
 should occupy themselves on their own.
This
 essay deals with
this
 controversial topic from different perspectives. One of the apparent disadvantages of organised
group
activities
 is that it usually costs a fortune to hire an efficient and skilled mentor. Because many tutors are not qualified
thus
, finding a competent person becomes a competition for parents. Another negative point of
this
 way of passing time is that
children
 become related to others to entertain themselves and maybe find it difficult to enjoy solo
activities
.
Last
 but not least, what can be more challenging is finding a reliable
group
.
Children
 are mostly impressed by their same ages, and a bad attitude could be very contagious among them.
On the other hand
, there are several benefits to organised
group
activities
. It's undeniable that human beings are deeply relayed on interpersonal relationships. By participating in groups,
children
 could increase their communication skills; it would rationally grow their self-confidence.
Additionally
, it would be considerably easier for
children
 to learn morals and skills among their peers.
Furthermore
, it's undeniable that spending time with other
children
 would be significantly more enjoyable than being alone and groups
activities
 could increase the sense of happiness among youth. Overall I think there are arguments for and against the idea of organised
group
activities
 the important thing is to be aware of those issues and choose the path that best suits individuals situation.
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