Crime is increasing among youngsters. What is cause of this situation and what solutions?
According to
research, it seems that teenagers are getting involved by
criminal activities day by day in most countries within the world. The causes of Change preposition
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involvements to be focused on two areas and the number of solutions also
appear to be possible. Perhaps a major factor here is bad
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a bad
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growing
parent
who do not care Fix the agreement mistake
parents
their
own child or childhood trauma like bullied by other children can affect their life, and cause Change preposition
about their
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fall throughout life. Correct pronoun usage
them to
Second
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a
lack of education which Correct article usage
the
students
study. Too much self-studies make
children Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
to
slack off. Turning to Change the verb form
apply
possible
solution, Add an article
a possible
obvious
step would be Correct article usage
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teach
new parents to take more care of their children. Fix the infinitive
to teach
Lastly
, make
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teacher
to more educate and watch their Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
students
and make less self-study because self-study makes students
more individual but not all students
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school, Change preposition
in primary
students
need teachers more than anyone. In summary factor of bad
environment is Correct article usage
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main
problem.Change the article
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite