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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, health issues are becoming more and more serious due to overconsumption of fast
food
.
Hence
, some people consider that levying a higher
tax
 on
such
food
 is essential. I generally disagree that
this
 approach can effectively decline consumption without having an adverse reaction from the whole society. One reason is that increasing
tax
 on high calories
food
 is unlikely to reduce its popularity. Most people consume it despite being aware of its unhealthiness and the consequences.
However
, fast
food
 might be the only choice for those who are constantly struggling to make a living.
In contrast
 to the heavy cost and time-taking healthy
food
,
this
food
 often has a more affordable price and are more accessible.
On the other hand
, affluent buyers can still contribute to the convenience
food
 intake since the raising
tax
 may have little impact on them. Another reason is that raising taxes on
food
 is a deprivation of human rights. In general, natural rights include having the freedom to choose, so individuals should be able to eat whatever they what, regardless of whether positive or negative effect it might bring.
Furthermore
, imposing additional
tax
 specifically on fast
food
 is unfair for competition among
food
 industries. Particularly Increase levy
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 unhealthy
food
 give rise to higher costs and fewer customers, which is unfair for those companies to compete with other
food
 companies. In conclusion, raising the
tax
 on convenience
food
 not only have no impact on fast
food
 consumption but
also
 makes low-income groups live a harsher life. Along with these drawbacks,
this
 action is an injustice for both customers and companies, removing the freedom of meal choice and fairness of business contests, and
thus
 it is possible to cause a public backlash.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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