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Writing Samples
Band 6

Some people believe that government grants should be offered to people to encourage them to buy electric vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, environmental issues are
biggest
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 for our planet. Authorities should be urged human beings to purchase electrical transportation tools. I completely agree that the executives should allocate more
fund
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funds
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 to cheer people to pay for
electric
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an electric
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vehicle
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vehicles
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. One reason to buy
electric
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an electric
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vehicle
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 is
environment
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the environment
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. Our ecosystem is becoming worse by using fossil fuel
vehicles
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. These are producing greenhouse gases
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 as CO2 and Methane. Greenhouse gases are very harmful
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ozone
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the ozone
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 layer.
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, exhaust fumes are going up.
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, there could appear a lot of health problems
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 as lung disease, cancer, etc. If we use
electric
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vehicle
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, we will get zero carbon footprint.
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, noise pollution is caused by mechanic
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. Using electric
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 will decrease
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air and noise pollution.
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, people spent more money
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 fossil fuel consuming
cars
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 than electric
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. İn addition, gas prices are very high currently.
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, we will save money by using electric
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.
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, as you use
electric
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vehicle
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, you will own your charging station at home. You do not need to go
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anywhere. You could charge your car at your home.
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, traffic congestion will bring down.
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, using electric
cars
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 are very beneficial for
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executives.
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, the taxes of
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electric
vehicles
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higher
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 than the other fossil fuel consuming
vehicles
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.
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 they can get more tax incomes. Eco-system can be improved by using electric
cars
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.
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, governments may allocate less budget to prevent environmental pollution. İn conclusion, using
electric
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an electric
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 can be seen a lot of beneficial
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affects
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effects
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both
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 environment and
governments
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government
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. I would agree that the politicians should be proposed to persons to hearten them to purchase
electric
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vehicle
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