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I would like to contribute to Indonesia specifically for inclusive education. Having solid finance background, I could bring advantages to support my career as a
development
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practitioner. Some of them
such
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as controlling
skill
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skills
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to assess the project operational risk and budgeting
skill
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skills
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to measure the feasibility of
development
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projects implementation.
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to that, I did years of volunteering in local
society
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social
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development
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which
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gave me some real context on the
development
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challenges in
this
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country and made me clarification on who and where is my target area of support after
graduated
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graduating
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I am keen to apply for LPDP scholarship which
also
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target
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to accelerate the country’s
development
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within different fields.
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, I could be an asset to the LPDP program and am committed to contributing to education in Indonesia.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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