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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#computers #part #education
Learning is the backbone and a crucial thing people experience in their life, be it
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theoretical
 or practical. The
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adulteration
 in education has
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 an integral part
which
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 uses hi-tech appliances
such
 as computers,
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 have been an inseparable part in the process of getting things known. I completely agree
on
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 using electronic goods for
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comprehensive studies nowadays without any hesitation. In
this
 21st century of modernization,
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technologies
 have soared
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great
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 extent that none of the
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 could remain off from its uses and application. For
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, the pandemic of covid left none of
students
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 untouched with the use of laptops, headphones and internets as there are classes running online.
Therefore
, many of them have graduated with their curriculum
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courses
 studying
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online and being at home, without any possibility of physical classes
subsequently
. Various aspects of education like research, that needs constant monitoring and evaluation of the processes, requires
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 methodology which uses statistics are only available with the computer's software uses. Despite the facts, those appliances have been an integral part of the courses with new
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 making
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 indispensable. One of the
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 published by
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 Union in the USA showed 80%
attendees
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of attendees
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 preferring online classes with their browser
such
 as
powerpoint
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PowerPoint
,
microsoft
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 word etc.
that
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consequently
 signifies the need
of
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techonological
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technological
 uses in the teaching method. To make
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 story short, advancement and digitalisation have made
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 impact in the education sector that
cann't
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can't
 be overlooked.
Thus
, everybody has smartphones and other electronic devices for learning
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varieties
 of things and
also
this
 trend will continue to rise in
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 days.
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