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Drug abuse is becoming more and more common in many countries. What are some of the problems associated with drug abuse, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Owing to the
problem
 is enhancing the number of narcotics abuse that becomes a huge issue in these days in many countries around the world.
This
 essay will discuss the causes of
such
 scarcity as well as possible solutions to the
problem
. One of the
first
 problems of
drug
use
 is that the most important
problem
 associated with
drugs
 is a crime, so most of the time the
drug
 users commit crimes. Mainly, the youth tend to
use
drug
 abuse because of a lack of information. They do not know the outcomes of using narcotics at the outset and following the time they begin to
use
 more
drugs
 and
finally
, they become
drug
 addicts. Sometimes, they cannot find money to get narcotics and it may lead them to commit crimes
such
 as burglary, stealing. Turning to the possible solutions for
this
problem
.Another issue is that some people take
drugs
 for their enjoyment and
then
 they
use
 them continuously. Some encounter a couple of problems in their families and among friends.
Therefore
, they think that taking
drugs
 is a better way to avoid
such
 problems. Despite
this
problem
,there are fortunately several solutions and the
first
 solution is that they can take a toll on surrounding societies, especially children.
In addition
, the government should take urgent actions, so they are expected to restrict the selling and using of
drugs
 in the countries or should have campaigns to struggle against
drugs
.And
also
, communities should help
drug
 addicts for recovering and try to save them from
drugs
. In conclusion,
although
 most governments and societies struggle against
drugs
, it is impossible to solve. Some private companies now produce
drugs
 and sell and stretch them illegally. In my view, countries should form an alliance in order to cancel
such
 companies and adults should control the behaviour of the youth.
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