Computers are becoming an essential part of education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Since
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technology
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people
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operate
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computer
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for
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daily
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basis.
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, to work,
study
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also
play games. Nowadays, society depends on gadgets, phones and
internet
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. Right now, we are in
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generation which everything could
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by
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online.
Therefore
, we need
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to
use
the
technology
. Many youngsters
use
a
computer
for learning
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because the curriculums of present education are contingent
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internet
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and industry 4.0. Why? According to many experts,
technology
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crucial
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of many aspects, one of them is education. My nephew is studying online because the pandemic attacks us and limits our acts towards education
such
as we could not freely go to school because it cause an
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number
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of COVID-19. In
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addiction
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, we often see students in the college using
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a tablet
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tablet
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,
laptop
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and
handphone
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for their learning. Since many materials and
softwares
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software
possibly access
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online,
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that's why people decided to
use
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rather
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that
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carrying books on every
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. In my opinion, I completely agree that
gadget
, including
computer
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computers
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,
phone
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phones
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,
tablet
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etcetera,
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us to improve our knowledge.
For instance
, research
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could access online,
news
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could find in
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in
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our
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, and I typed my thesis with my laptop and it is more efficient than
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on
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a book. Yet, the impact of
technology
itself is dangerous because if we look into our
computer
constantly, it is could affect
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our sight. Eyes might get tired easily because we
surving
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surviving
serving
to internet non-stop.
Moreover
, many oldies find the
technology
sceptically. We can't guarantee if students who bring
gadget
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every single day will improve
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or
her
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academic results.
Consequently
, computers usage have advantages and disadvantages. I strongly believe if we could
use
technology
diligently it would avoid us to many
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cause
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by
gadget
-using activities.
However
, there is still
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of procedure
of
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using the
gadget
effectively.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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