You recently made a journey by train. When you got on the train, you realised you had left a bag on the platform. Write a letter to the station manager. In your letter •give details of where and when you left the bag •describe the bag and its contents •suggest how you could get the bag back

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Dear Station Manager, I am writing to report a lost

bag

that I accidentally left on the platform at the station on October 27, 2024. I boarded the fourth train car departing at 10:30 a.m. and only realized once I was on board that my

bag

had been left behind. The

bag

Is a medium-sized brown suitcase with a small logo

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the middle. It has a side pocket where I keep a water bottle

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and a tag with my initials on one of the straps. Inside the

bag

, there are some important personal items, including my laptop, a notebook with some notes for work, a charger, and a few personal documents. These items are essential for my daily work, and I would be very grateful for any assistance in retrieving them. Could you please let me know if the

bag

has been found? I would be happy to pick it up at the station or arrange to have it sent to my address, if possible. I appreciate your help in

this

matter and look forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you very much for your assistance. Sincerely, Sam

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The letter uses clear and appropriate greetings and closings.

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The tone of the letter is respectful and suits the context of a formal request.

Coherence and Cohesion

The letter provides a clear description of the lost bag and contents, maintaining reader's understanding.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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6 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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