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In some countries, people waste a lot of food which is bought in shops and restaurants. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to solve this problem？

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In recent years,
due to
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 the increasing of life
standard
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standards
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, consumers, especially in developed countries throw away a
numerous
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lot of
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 uneaten
food
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 brought from restaurants or shops. The wasted
food
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 produced by
people
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 has been a concerned issue that
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government
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the government
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 and
environmentalist
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environmentalists
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concerned
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are concerned
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 about.
This
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 essay
would
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will
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 talk about the reason
of
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for
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food
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 spoilage and the solution for it. The reasons for
the
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apply
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food
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wasting
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waste
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is
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are
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 obvious.
Firstly
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, as the living standard of individuals has increased,
in
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apply
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which
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apply
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buyers tend to
purchase
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 the products on their
preference
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preferences
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instead
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 of
consumed
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consuming
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base
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based
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 on their needs.
For instance
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, consumers in
restaurant
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restaurants
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 usually order more dishes
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then
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than
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 they actually need, as the exquisite pictures in menus attract them to
purchase
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overmuch
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more
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food
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.
Additionally
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, the packaging and advertisements would lead to
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food wasting
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food-wasting
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 for the reason
that
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because
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 some nutritionists might attract buyers to
purchase
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the
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apply
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food
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 which is healthy and low calorie,
that
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which
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 makes them throw away unhealthy
food
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 and buy the
food
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 nutritionists
sells
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sell
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 and
hoarding
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hoard
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these
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apply
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for a long time.
However
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, there are some solutions for
food
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wasting
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waste
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. One of these is that
government
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 can set several policies to
avoid
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prevent
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people
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throw
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from throwing
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 away
the
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apply
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unspoiled or
the
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apply
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fresh
food
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. As an illustration of the
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food wasting
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food-wasting
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 policy,
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government
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the government
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needs
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needs to
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 prevent
people
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 from wasting
food
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from
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by
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 formulating
the
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apply
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rules, increasing fines and
make
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making
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 the restrictions more
seriously
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serious
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.
Moreover
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, as
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a numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
people
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purchase
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 useless and unpalatable
food
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due to
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 the tempting
advertisement
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advertisements
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,
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government
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the government
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 can introduce some
advertisement
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advertisements
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 and give publicity to the hardness of agriculture to ensure
people
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can
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know the value of
food
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.
Consequently
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, as
masses
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the masses
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own
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increase
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the
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their
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 awareness of saving
food
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, the concept of consumption
of
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apply
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citizens would be better and
therefore
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 the phenomenon of wasting
food
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 would decrease.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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