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In some countries, people waste a lot of food which is bought in shops and restaurants. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to solve this problem？

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In recent years,
due to
 the increasing of life
standard
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standards
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, consumers, especially in developed countries throw away a
numerous
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lot of
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 uneaten
food
 brought from restaurants or shops. The wasted
food
 produced by
people
 has been a concerned issue that
government
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the government
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 and
environmentalist
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environmentalists
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concerned
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are concerned
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 about.
This
 essay
would
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will
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 talk about the reason
of
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for
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food
 spoilage and the solution for it. The reasons for
the
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food
wasting
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waste
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is
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are
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 obvious.
Firstly
, as the living standard of individuals has increased,
in
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which
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apply
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buyers tend to
purchase
 the products on their
preference
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instead
 of
consumed
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consuming
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base
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based
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 on their needs.
For instance
, consumers in
restaurant
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restaurants
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 usually order more dishes
then
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than
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 they actually need, as the exquisite pictures in menus attract them to
purchase
overmuch
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more
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food
.
Additionally
, the packaging and advertisements would lead to
food wasting
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food-wasting
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 for the reason
that
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because
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 some nutritionists might attract buyers to
purchase
the
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apply
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food
 which is healthy and low calorie,
that
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which
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 makes them throw away unhealthy
food
 and buy the
food
 nutritionists
sells
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 and
hoarding
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hoard
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these
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apply
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for a long time.
However
, there are some solutions for
food
wasting
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waste
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. One of these is that
government
 can set several policies to
avoid
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prevent
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people
throw
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from throwing
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 away
the
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apply
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unspoiled or
the
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fresh
food
. As an illustration of the
food wasting
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food-wasting
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 policy,
government
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the government
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needs
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needs to
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 prevent
people
 from wasting
food
from
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by
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 formulating
the
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rules, increasing fines and
make
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making
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 the restrictions more
seriously
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serious
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.
Moreover
, as
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a numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
people
purchase
 useless and unpalatable
food
due to
 the tempting
advertisement
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advertisements
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,
government
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the government
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 can introduce some
advertisement
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advertisements
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 and give publicity to the hardness of agriculture to ensure
people
can
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know the value of
food
.
Consequently
, as
masses
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the masses
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own
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increase
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the
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their
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 awareness of saving
food
, the concept of consumption
of
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citizens would be better and
therefore
 the phenomenon of wasting
food
 would decrease.
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