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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment?

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Nowadays, some
people
 prefer to live in a
house
 and other types of
people
 like to live
an
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apartment
 than
the
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a
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house
, and they think that to live in
the
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an
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apartment
,
it
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is good and gives a lot of advantages. The
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 essay discusses the minds and gives a number of examples and experiments. On the one hand, some
people
 like to live
a
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in a
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house
 or flat, because their
life
 manner is
habit
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 and suitable to live there. They think, if the
people
 live the cottage or
house
, their behaviour and
life style
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lifestyle
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 become wonderful and better than the other types of community and can live easily in
life
.
Consequently
, the
people
, which is live
on
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 the
house
,
they
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never do hard
works
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,
for instance
, garden and
house
works
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. In my view, that har work factors become disadvantages to
live
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 an
apartment
 and show us to carrying out the
life
 a
house
 is comfortable and useful. On the one side,
that
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those
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 categories of
people
 are right too.
On the other hand
, the
second
 groups of
people
 are right.
furthermore
, the apartments are more comfortable and give several advantages than the
house
 or cottage, because If the
people
 carrying out their
life
 in
appartment
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apartment
, they feel very strong and emotional in due to
house
 and heavy garden and other works.
For example
, if the
people
 live
an
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apartment
at
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 the village, certainly, they work a lot
on
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in
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 the garden every day and because of that labour and like that types of tasks, the
people
 become
on
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a
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healthy and rarely, almost never, they feel themselves on the depression. In my look, those opinions are correct too. In conclusion, I join, the
second
 categories
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of
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od
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of
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people
. In my view, the apartments, there are amount of advantages for
people
life style
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lifestyle
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, healthy, and of course,
their
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they're
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 nervous.
Moreover
,
people
 live the apartments near
a
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big and large mountains, gardens, lakes and others, they will be funny. They do not be nervous and angry
for
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 the small negative details.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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