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As a medical professional, I have a strong interest of combine technology with my healthcare expertise to enhance
treatment
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and life quality of
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. Throughout my previous experience, I have had a great opportunity to work
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a digital care project with a start-up to create chest wearable devices that can help physicians monitor COPD
patients
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remotely by collecting physiological parameters of
patients
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at home. Collected
data
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will be analyzed, visualized to medical reports and assessed periodically by doctors. An early warning system based on machine learning using
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has been
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underdeveloped
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under developed
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that is
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capable of predicting when a patient may exacerbate based on
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history and abnormal symptoms from daily collected
data
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. When an
exacerbation
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is detected, a warning or message will be automatically sent to physicians and
patients
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with instructions.
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, physicians can monitor remotely, increase self-management of
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, intervene promptly
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exacerbation
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and avoid hospitalization. Throughout
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project, I am intrigued by
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impacts that technology and A.
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application can bring to help improve
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of
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. Enrolling
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health informatics program will help me sharpen health
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analysis skills, upgrade my competency of handling medical complexity by using technology and
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lead A.I based change in healthcare settings in the future. My career goal is to conduct research on digital care projects that can utilize the application of A.I and machine learning to help analyze daily patient
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and medical imaging to predict
exacerbation
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or abnormal symptoms that may potentially lead to emergency care.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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