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What are causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

#illiteracy #world #effects #people #society
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There should be a wide-ranging discussion about illiteracy within the trendy world which has
impact
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an impact
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 on unlettered people and the community.
While
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this
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 phenomenon is complex, there seem to be two main causes and three effects, which we will discuss here. Possibly the main cause is uneducated
parent
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 who play role
model
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 in their family. Some of them do not value
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education, and others do not have an opportunity to get a proper schooling.
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, it may be assumed that illiteracy is inherited
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 generation to generation. Another well-known factor here is difficulty
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condition
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conditions
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such
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 as poverty, lower life expectancies and poorer employment.
This
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 is
exacerbating
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 condition that
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 poor. The effects of
this
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 issue on those people and society can be quite serious. When it comes to effects, people
get
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a
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little or no schooling
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 to
living
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 in
the
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poverty which leads to less financial security
which
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 results in
day to day
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 life that cannot
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about
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proper education. It is a widely held
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 that being unlettered and poverty can be part of
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the evil
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 of
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.
Next
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 outcome is they tend to have low self-esteem to express themselves in their communications which
damage
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a
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 quality of their lives. A
further
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 widely-observed impact might be their contribution
on
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 society. It could be argued that
a
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 crime rate tends to be high through
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illiteracy group.
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, no schooling person affects
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 unemployment rate which
leads to make
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 it weaker in
nation’s
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the nation’s
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 development.
Sum
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 up, uneducated
parent
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parents
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 and
low paying
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low-paying
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job
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 seem to be the main causes, and they affect both individuals and
community
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the community
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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