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Nowadays, most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this balance. What are the problems of this? Suggest some solutions to solve the problem?

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Currently, many
people
 want to make a
work-
life
balance
 for their work and another part of their lives because
people
 are more aware of mental
health
.
Work-
life
balance
 not just focuses on the employ but for students too, Students make a slogan when their finish their target they should make self reward for their achievement. Mental healthy make human more consider of themself and
people
 release
health
 is not about physical but mental too. In 2020, pandemics make so many aspects of
people
's lives change.
People
 should stay at home and do their job remotely,
this
 problem makes
people
 don't really mind about their time for work and because of that
people
 brain out and get mental
health
issue
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. From
this
 situation,
people
 make a move to promote
work-
life
balance
 for their inside happiness. But, not all industries understand that because their just focus to make money. From my point of view,
people
 should understand each other and make
work-
life
balance
 real for all
people
. We should educate all
people
 that
work-
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a work-life
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life
balance
 can
makes
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people
 more productive, creative, and passionate about their job. Students and employees can make a good job if their mental
health
 is good and
people
 will more enjoy their
life
.
Life
 is short and
people
 deserve to be happy in their
life
 and
this
 way is one step to make
people
 happier. So, We should be working together to make a beautiful
life
 start from making a
work-
life
balance
, not just a promotion but make it real. from
this
, we can reach good mental
health
 for citizens.

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