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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that driverless
technology
 has a remarkable development in recent years, which probably be able to lead a new trend in all industries. The new
technology
 has some advantages in personal and social aspects, while the disadvantages should not be ignored. To start with, automatic driving
technology
 helps to improve
the
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efficiency.
For instance
, when
people
 are on the way to the office, it allows them to address other issues simultaneously, like making
phone
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, attending video
conference
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, sending E-mail.
In addition
,
people
 can have a rest on their journey to avoid being tired and the traffic accidents caused by tired drivers are able to decline dramatically.
Moreover
, it enables companies to find an effective solution for some sectors which are dangerous for
people
, like mining exploitation.
However
, there are some drawbacks to the
technology
 of automatic driving.
Firstly
, without the drivers who are mostly well trained and able to cope with emergencies in a Standard Operating Procedures (SOP), it can be a threat to passengers’ lives.
Secondly
,
people
 related to the area of driving and service may lose their job opportunities in the new trend, which will lead to a heavy burden for society.
Finally
, if the new
technology
 were widely applied, the old vehicles that are not suitable for it anymore have to be abandoned, which may cause damages to the environment. In conclusion,
although
 applying the high
technology
 of driverless offers several benefits, the drawbacks should be concerned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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