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Some people think the spread of multinational companies and globalization produce positive outcomes for everyone. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #spread #companies #globalization #outcomes
I am communicating to express my great interest in applying for the
Ph.D.
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 position of a project of the Artificial Intelligence for the Sciences (Al4theSciences) doctoral programme. Currently, I held a
Master
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 Degree in Chemical Engineering at Shiraz University and graduated from the University of Tehran (in Iran) with a Bachelor of Science degree in Chemical Engineering. During
university
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 years, not only provided the opportunity to design a pilot plant and different
research
-based work environment but
also
 developed my capacity to synthesise various catalysts (including two published papers). I became fascinated by new discoveries in
research
 and decided to work in the R&D department in a petrochemical company for roughly six years. Through my years of working, I collaborated with a
research
 group on distinct fields, which allowed me to build on my concentration and team-working skills. While most of my
research
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 been focused on Artificial Intelligence (AI). Today,
the
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AI techniques are becoming useful due to simple implementation, easy
designing
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, generality and flexibility. I concentrated on
estimation
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 of catalyst hydrogen production through water-gas shift reaction taking advantage of "machine learning technique" and soft computing approach" and contributed to publishing two papers, too. As an active member of
company
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, I have been charged as the scientific representative in academic cooperation with Iran Polymer and Petrochemical Institute (IPPI), in consequence, I have learned how to solve problems, build relationships, and negotiate practical solutions. The Artificial intelligence study
of
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involved in chemical engineering senses caught my attention immediately because it gives me the chance to apply new techniques to environmentally friendly systems
that is
 what I like and enjoy the most. As a highly motivated
Ph.D.
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 applicant, I am widely enthusiastic
in
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 joining your esteemed
research
 team and working on the project of the AI4theSciences programme (2021-2024). I have attached my CV and latest papers, abstracts for
further
 evaluations to see if I can be the type of candidate you are looking for. I look forward to hearing from you and appreciate your time and consideration.
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