Some governments provide financial assistance for retired, unemployed and disabled citizens. In other countries, families provide support for these people. Discuss both systems and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there is much controversy over the most responsible organ for supporting the residents who are not able to afford their finances. In some countries

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is the

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's responsibility, while in other places their families have the duty.

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it is noteworthy to bear in mind that both sides need to do their best to help

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vulnerable society, in my

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the

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should play a greater role. The following essay will overlook both views and

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with my opinion. On one hand, the

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has always been viewed as the most capable authority in a country to solve

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problems. It not only has the capacity to do it but

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is expected by the voters.

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, the number of these citizens is increasing while the inflation is.

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, in recent years the number of unemployed

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of a family doubled, so the other family

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are not able to afford the expenses

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.

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, the

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people require the advanced facilities to live a life that they deserve which paying is only feasible for the

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.

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, humans have been paying taxes during their lives with

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hope of having a reasonable retirement with their pensions.

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, in some

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the family is expected to manage the finances of their unable

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as the sheer responsible one due to the duties they have toward

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each other

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, the elderly

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move to their offspring's houses and live with them for their remnant years of lives as

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dependent

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. It is said that as they took care of their children in their childhood, the young generation should reciprocate their

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by taking care of them over their old ages. The

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citizens are being taken care

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relatives because they understand their needs better.

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, unemployed persons should ask for help from their siblings since they are connected with blood. To sum up, I believe that based on

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reasons the

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might be a better organ to help vulnerable society

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. Though the

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due to the citizens' services and the family due to their bounds have

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responsibility, the

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has a greater power to deal with these obstacles.