Some think Government spending on Infrastructure (Transport, Housing etc) is considered the most important for a nation. While others believe that Education, Health and HR values to be more important areas for government expenditure. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In
this
modern scenario,all things are considered to be the most imperative for countries it may be technical or non-technical,but here some individuals
believet
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believe
believes
that they should be necessary for citizens to survive luxurious life in terms of accommodation and convey amenities,so
government
must take responsibility to improve these
facilities
,while others argue that pedagogy,well-being and HR values are the most dominant,
thus
authorities should spend money on these provisions. To embark on,there are some reasons behind it why
government
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has to point out on the
facilities
of housing and transporting.
Firstly
,these days,many destitute multitudes have become homeless due to overpopulation as well as increasing home rents.
Consequently
,many masses are used to survive under the trees and beside the roads.
Secondly
,
although
transport amenities are improved in metropolitan areas,some rural areas are troubled with the lack of bus services.
As a result
,many scholars are not able to reach their destinations.
For instance
,most of the youngsters can not go to colleges or schools,even though they have a desire to study.
This
is
also
one of the
reason
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why
regime
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should have to centre on these provisions. On another hand,nowadays,
although
there are many medical
facilities
,still many
people
are dying as they are not unable to receive
a
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treatment on time
due to
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because
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they do not have enough money to get treatment,
therefore
the regime should spend money on constructing new hospitals.
For example
,these days,in private hospitals,poor
people
may not be
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a
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therapy because they are used to
demand
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high income,
thus
government
try to provide free service
those
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people
who are below poverty.
Moreover
,not only
health
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the health
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department is primary but
also
education
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the education
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and HR departments are
also
imperative for destitute
people
,so authorities try to
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all of these
facilities
free of cost for them in order to they will survive happily. To conclude,both statements play an indispensable role in everyone's life,so
government
should be considered all of these
facilities
are important
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their own way,
therefore
education,transport,housing,health and HR values are imperative.
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  • foreign investments
  • business operations
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • quality of life
  • homelessness
  • affordable living conditions
  • knowledgeable workforce
  • skilled workforce
  • innovation
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