Some think Government spending on Infrastructure (Transport, Housing etc) is considered the most important for a nation. While others believe that Education, Health and HR values to be more important areas for government expenditure. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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modern scenario,all things are considered to be the most imperative for countries it may be technical or non-technical,but here some individuals
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that they should be necessary for citizens to survive luxurious life in terms of accommodation and convey amenities,so
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must take responsibility to improve these
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,while others argue that pedagogy,well-being and HR values are the most dominant,
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authorities should spend money on these provisions. To embark on,there are some reasons behind it why
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has to point out on the
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of housing and transporting.
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,these days,many destitute multitudes have become homeless due to overpopulation as well as increasing home rents.
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,many masses are used to survive under the trees and beside the roads.
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transport amenities are improved in metropolitan areas,some rural areas are troubled with the lack of bus services.
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,many scholars are not able to reach their destinations.
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,most of the youngsters can not go to colleges or schools,even though they have a desire to study.
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why
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should have to centre on these provisions. On another hand,nowadays,
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there are many medical
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,still many
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are dying as they are not unable to receive
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they do not have enough money to get treatment,
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the regime should spend money on constructing new hospitals.
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,these days,in private hospitals,poor
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therapy because they are used to
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high income,
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government
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try to provide free service
those
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people
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who are below poverty.
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,not only
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department is primary but
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education
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and HR departments are
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imperative for destitute
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,so authorities try to
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all of these
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free of cost for them in order to they will survive happily. To conclude,both statements play an indispensable role in everyone's life,so
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should be considered all of these
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are important
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their own way,
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education,transport,housing,health and HR values are imperative.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • foreign investments
  • business operations
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • quality of life
  • homelessness
  • affordable living conditions
  • knowledgeable workforce
  • skilled workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • public health
  • life expectancy
  • burden of diseases
  • employee satisfaction
  • employee retention
  • long-term benefits
  • immediate economic gains
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