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Some think Government spending on infraestructure (transport, housing) is considered the most important for a nation. While others believe that education, health, and HR values to be more important areas for government expenditure. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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If public resources were infinite, there would be no arguments
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 to distribute them. But since
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they are very limited indeed, the
way
 the National Budget has to be spent must be carefully planned. Some voices
claims
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 that the tools for engrossing the nation’s wealth should have
preference
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, while some others advocate for boosting education and public health. In
this
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 I will look at both points of view and I will argue that, while infrastructure is fundamental, the nation’s strength
also
 resides on
people
, and economic policies should be oriented towards them.
Firstly
, it is undeniable that public welfare has a great influence
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economy
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. Experts have demonstrated that a healthy and unworried person works harder and better than the opposite.
Furthermore
, the biggest economies of the world are the ones
who
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 have the biggest welfare budgets.
Additionally
, public opinion always has expressed that the task
government
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 is to do the best for the most.
Thus
, benefiting industrial companies or lobbies could not be seen as a responsible
way
 of assigning funds by the public in general.
However
, public transport and housing can
also
 be seen as a
way
 of providing commodities to
people
. Workers are interested
on
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 having better housing facilities and driving on
better paved
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 roads for their commuting or on their holidays.
Consequently
, infrastructure echoes on the living standards. Taking all
this
 into account, in my
opinion
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 the budgets for infrastructure and public welfare are closely intertwined,
therefore
 the
way
 how these fundings impact
on
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the needs of the
people
 is the crux of the issue. Both subjects must be funded thinking about how
people
 will
be profited
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 about it.
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