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Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this? Write at least 250 words.

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There are many types of activities to improve our health, one that we can do is by walking.
Nevertheless
, people nowadays have a very limited
time
 to spare their
time
 to walk
therefore
 they use choose other workouts. There are some ways to tackle
this
 problem from starting days earlier to using sports equipment for efficiency. In a fast-paced environment, people like workers and students do have not much
time
 to do exercise which may take up most of their
time
. Walking is an example of an activity that will take of their regular
time
. Another reason is people who mostly live in the city do not have many open spaces where they can breathe the fresh air without pollution,
thus
 most of them are reluctant to go walking.
Nevertheless
,
this
 can be a motive to find other solutions. If
time
 and air pollutions are the notions behind the res,
therefore
 starting to walk earlier at 5.30 am can be an apt solution. Sparing 20-25 minutes to walk nearby our area around that
time
 will be great since the air pollution is not as dense as working hours. On top of that, we can use the treadmill as another alternative where we can walk from home and worry less about the
time
 and pollution. The minute the exercise is done, the bathroom is only five steps away. More than saving
time
, it can
also
 allow you not to rush on commencing the day. In conclusion, there are some alternatives to walking by starting the day earlier before the busy hour or trying to walk on a treadmill from home.
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