PEOPLE SAY THAT SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH SHOULD FOCUS ON SOLVING WORLD HEALTH PROBLEMS. OTHERS THINK THAT SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH SHOULD FOCUS ON MORE IMPORTANT THINGS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEW AND GIVE YOUR OPINION

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of knowledge that people often find difficult to study and to explore.

However

, a number of people believe that scientific research should focus on alleviating global

health

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that

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the

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other

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on

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every

country

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problem

in their circumstances.

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crucial aspects of humans. Since

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there are lots of

problems

related to people

health

nowadays.

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essential in every

country

across the world, especially in developing countries.

Hence

, there's a lot of

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that forces the

government

to solved

health

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in their

country

. One of them is because

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of

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representatives

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of regions think that

health

issues become

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dangerous

problem

among the others. Statistics of each province states the

health

ratio,

for

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a mortality ratio, a natality ratio and etcetera show a low quality of

health

sectors

,

for instance

in Indonesia. Another reason is

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health

is the most vulnerable

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compared to

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other aspects

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education,

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governance and

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economy. In my opinion, all

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to individuals are important, so that's why a

government

needs to overcome

this

challenge. There are two solutions to tackle

this

belief.

First

, according to an economist of Indonesia who become a Minister of Finance, said that economics is the core of many disciplines in humanities.

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is implied that economics is inherently multidisciplinary,

thus

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problem

in

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sector

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in other

sectors

.

Second

, the

government

of Indonesia

for example

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has many ministries

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responsible to handle each sector's

problem

. The Ministry of Environmental could tackle an

environment

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problems

. The Ministry of

Health

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definitely could control the number of deaths or an increasing rate of COVID-19. I

am completely believe

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that the

government

can easily helps citizen despite

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their main

problem

which is in

this

statement is

health

. In conclusion, my opinion is that whatever the main issues of the

country

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, the

government

has their own

roles

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to overcome the

problems

itself.

In addition

, every

country

has their own national issues that need to tackle and most of them are not about

health

.

However

,

this

main statement should be

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by

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evidence of

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that successfully

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their discovery in various areas.