PEOPLE SAY THAT SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH SHOULD FOCUS ON SOLVING WORLD HEALTH PROBLEMS. OTHERS THINK THAT SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH SHOULD FOCUS ON MORE IMPORTANT THINGS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEW AND GIVE YOUR OPINION

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of knowledge that people often find difficult to study and to explore.

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, a number of people believe that scientific research should focus on alleviating global

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every

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in their circumstances.

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across the world, especially in developing countries.

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that forces the

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in their

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. One of them is because

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of

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of regions think that

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issues become

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dangerous

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among the others. Statistics of each province states the

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a mortality ratio, a natality ratio and etcetera show a low quality of

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in Indonesia. Another reason is

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is the most vulnerable

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education,

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governance and

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economy. In my opinion, all

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that

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to individuals are important, so that's why a

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needs to overcome

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, according to an economist of Indonesia who become a Minister of Finance, said that economics is the core of many disciplines in humanities.

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is implied that economics is inherently multidisciplinary,

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I think economics can solve the

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sector

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in other

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has many ministries

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responsible to handle each sector's

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. The Ministry of Environmental could tackle an

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problems

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definitely could control the number of deaths or an increasing rate of COVID-19. I

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that the

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can easily helps citizen despite

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their main

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. In conclusion, my opinion is that whatever the main issues of the

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, the

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to overcome the

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itself.

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, every

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has their own national issues that need to tackle and most of them are not about

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evidence of

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that successfully

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their discovery in various areas.