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Online education is becoming increasingly popular. many university students are choosing to study online instead of face to face. Do the advantages of distance education outweigh the disadvantages?

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Distant learning has become more popular, especially during the covid-19 pandemic. While I accept that
this
 would have several benefits, I believe that the drawbacks are outweighed. On the one hand, online
education
 would certainly have three main advantages.
Firstly
, it would help the
students
 and lecturers to save time commuting which may result in less anxiety and more energy during a course.
For example
, pupils might stick in traffic congestion for a while to reach the university which affects their mental health and concentration.
Secondly
, they can study in the top universities around the world without living in a foreign country.
For instance
, a person can get her or his degree from the universities
such
 as Berkeley, MIT, Harvard, Stanford and so on while living in another country
such
 as Iran, England, Australia etc.
Finally
,
this
 type of
education
 is likely to benefit shy or introverted
students
' performance that avoids face-to-face communication.
However
, I would argue that these advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Distant
education
 is likely to be not as efficient as face-to-face learning. In
this
 case, the chance of distractions for both learners and professors would highly increase to the point that may negatively affect
students
' productivity. Another drawback would be that people miss the opportunity of good communication with their peers or teachers, while universities are often good places to connect to others. At
last
, the result of online
education
 would be doubtful because
students
 can easily cheat on their exams without anyone noticing. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential inefficiency of a distant learning system is more significant than the possible benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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