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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Some individuals commented that rather than mitigating global warming, human beings should survive with it. Personally, I strongly disagree with the view since scientific evidence has shown that if not tackled, all the
livings
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living
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 on the planet would be extinct soon and the unique way out to deal with it is changing dramatically the natural
energy
 sources.
This
 essay will shed light on the overriding reasons for my disagreement and provide evidence to prove the arguments. There are manifold motives why I believe individuals should find a way to eschew climate alteration. First and foremost, if not irradicated, the human specimen is menaced to disappear.
In other words
, there is no mid-term when addressing facts about global warming
due to
 the fact that if any measure is not taken urgently, the planet
earth
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Earth
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 could be extinct.
For example
, the new projection by IPCC pointed out that from now to 10 or 20 years, extreme weather events like cyclones, floods, and the increasing average temperature will continue soaring.
As a result
, the harsh weather victims will climb as the earth becomes an inappropriate place to live.
Secondly
,
energy
 matrix changing is the unique pathway to glossing over climate issues. The carbon footprints sent to the earth's atmosphere
is
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 increasing daily
due to
 the fast lighting construction of industries,
increasing
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and increasing
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in
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automobiles
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 factories,
for
this
 reason, the world folk should invest more in renewable
energy
 sources.
For instance
,
the
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 new investigation by
energy
 connoisseurs showcased that one solar power plant of 10 MV powers 1000 houses and a significant number of industries and reduces 10 times the emission of exhaust fumes.
Hence
, implanting at least 5 of these
energy
 power plants across the world
avoids
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 the world from collapsing. In conclusion, in fact, evidence demonstrates that it is almost impossible to live with climate change on our planet because it will vanish our species in the near future.
Therefore
, I still strongly disagree with the statement.
In addition
, I recommend the world-ruling power instils measures to counter the environmental clime change.
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task response
Ensure each paragraph directly addresses the essay prompt and maintains focus on the argument against living with climate change.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the introduction and conclusion. Include a clear thesis statement in the introduction and summarize key points in the conclusion.
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