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Some think government spending on infrastructure (transport, housing etc) is considered the most important for a nation. While others believe that education, health and HR values more important areas for government expenditure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some argue
government
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 should invest in building infrastructure whereas others believe providing
education
, medical and
job
opportunities
 is much more important for a
country
.
However
, in my opinion,
state's
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first
 priority is to provide ample access to
education
 and medical services for everyone. Making life easier and
comfortable
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more comfortable
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 for every citizen might be the reason behind people belief who think spending on infrastructure is crucial for a nation. In developing countries where
majority
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the majority
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 of
population
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the population
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 belongs to
middle
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the middle
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 class who are not able to buy a car or other vehicle,
then
 it is the responsibility of
government
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the government
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 to provide cheaper transportation services so that they can commute to their workplace and home by just paying little money.
Furthermore
,
for
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a person with
average
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an average
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 income who can only
fufill
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fulfil
 his basic needs
such
 as clothes and
foods
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food
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 cannot even think of buying
home
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a home
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.
Hence
 some think,
government
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the government
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 should
also
 invest
on
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in
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 housing for
much needed
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much-needed
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 people.
On the other hand
who
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it
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 supports the view that
government
 emphasizes should be on creating more educational
institute
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institutes
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, hospitals, and better
job
opportunities
 for its public . Because it is
basic
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a basic
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 right of every citizen to get
education
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an education
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 and good health facilities. Investing in industries
also
 develop the
job
opportunities
 between the younger population who will ultimately contribute
in
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to
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the nations
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nations
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nation's
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 economy and will make effort to
built
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build
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better
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a better
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 future for their
country
. There is no doubt,
healthy
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a healthy
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 and educated population is
further
assets
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asset
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 of a
country
.
Hence
 it is
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the government
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government
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government's
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 primary responsibility to make efforts in the betterment of
education
 and medical systems. To conclude, good hospitals, free
education
 and
lot
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a lot
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 of
job
opportunities
 will benefit the
country
 so
government
 should invest in these sectors
first
.
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