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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the data and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the information about five different primary funding
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 of international
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 in the US. between 2003
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04 and 2013
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14 The general overview is that most international
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 funding came from personal and their family in both periods. While the total amount of
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 was increased throughout the period stated in the question. As we can see, personal and family had played an important role in their children’s funding. They obtained the highest percentages as 67% or 385,543
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 in 2003
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04. Followed by the percentage of US. college or university source gained by 23% or 134,015
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. While foreign government or university and current employer funding
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 acquired the same lowest percentages at 2% in
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 period. According to the year 2013
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14, funding from personal and family
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 was still the
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 option for the international
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. The proportion was accounted for 65% or 574,129
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. Interestingly, the number of
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 increased around three times in foreign government or university funding
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 from 13,699
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 to 66,147
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 in
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 period.
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, other
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 of funding obtained the lowest rate at 7%
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 year.

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